A Frankness of Character: A Pride and Prejudice Variation
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- Create Date：2022-06-16 13:21:38
- Update Date：2025-09-06
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- Author：Pemberley Darcy
- ISBN：B0B36JGM74
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Reviews
Debbie
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There are quite a few interesting twists to the traditional Pride and Prejudice storyline starting right at the onset of this variation。 At the Meryton assembly， after Mr。 Darcy has insulted Elizabeth Bennet within her hearing， he overhears her in conversation with Charlotte expressing her poor opinion of him。 Upon reflection， he realizes he should apologize and calls at Longbourn the next day to tender it - but he presents it poorly and his response is a thorough tongue-lashing from the lady。Th There are quite a few interesting twists to the traditional Pride and Prejudice storyline starting right at the onset of this variation。 At the Meryton assembly， after Mr。 Darcy has insulted Elizabeth Bennet within her hearing， he overhears her in conversation with Charlotte expressing her poor opinion of him。 Upon reflection， he realizes he should apologize and calls at Longbourn the next day to tender it - but he presents it poorly and his response is a thorough tongue-lashing from the lady。This sets Darcy back on his heels， as he's never considered that his behavior might be lacking until now。 He writes Colonel Fitzwilliam to seek his cousin's advice。 Instead of answering the letter， the good colonel decides to come to Netherfield himself， getting there not long after the rain-sodden Jane Bennet has arrived for her tea with the Bingley sisters。 Colonel Fitzwilliam's presence changes the trajectory of the plot as he immediately recognizes how perfect Elizabeth and Darcy are for each other。 He counsels his cousin and challenges Caroline Bingley's poisonous attitudes。 When he becomes aware Wickham is in the local militia， he takes swift action， unintentionally triggering later events。 I really like the basic storyline and most of its offshoots。 In an entertaining segment， Mr。 Collins's mission to return to Kent betrothed gets turned on its head and leads to Darcy to act precipitously。 The garbled account Mr Collins gives Lady Catherine regarding his failure to secure a bride as she had directed sends her off on a crusade of her own， including a diverting scene between the Grand Lady and the unimpressed Lydia Bennet。 Underlying everything， the romance between Darcy and Elizabeth plays out nicely， going through its ups and downs as events unfold around them。The author presents a few impressive insights into such things as the reasons for Mr。 Darcy's habit of remaining aloof in company （it's more than being naturally shy） and the relationship between Mr。 and Mrs。 Bennet。Unfortunately， these insights are buried beneath way too much character introspection， telling rather than showing， and tedious redundancy of information。 There's plenty of activity to allow events to drive the plot forward at a good pace。 Instead， everything bogs down for long periods as a character thinks about things （rehashing the same ideas repeatedly） and then talks the same things over with another character。 The sad result is a book that's much longer than necessary， and it feels that way。In addition， there are distracting misspellings and punctuation errors throughout which increase as the story goes on。 Overall， I found it to be full of good ideas but a disappointing read。 The content is generally clean。 However， be aware that the potential for an unmarried girl spending too much time alone with a man to eventually end up in a brothel is discussed， and Mrs Bennet and Mrs Phillips give rather vulgar （though not graphic） details regarding wifely duties。 。。。more
Terri Conley
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This book was so wittily written reminiscent of Janes original。 An enjoyable read for me look forward to more to come。
Laura Jimenez
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I liked it。 Some typos and random commas did not take away from the enjoyment。 I loved how the characters were portrayed and how the dialogue was not stilted。
Michelle
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Interesting A rather interesting and action packed variation inspired by author Jane Austen’s classic novel Pride and Prejudice by Pemberley Darcy。 I enjoyed it。
James S
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Lots of Frankness in the book。 So much so the plot isn’t driven by non-communication or miscommunication。 Interesting take by the author。 I enjoyed some newish views we have about Lizzy and Darcy I didn’t enjoyed reading in detail about thing we knew before but one character was telling another character。All in all a pretty good story。 Glad I read it。
Mrs Janice Hill
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One of the best variations I've read。 Clever engaging storyline and a very happy ending。 Loved our familiar characters witty Lizzy sensible Charlotte beautiful kind naive Jane are all true to character as are bingley Darcy and Fitzwilliam。 Plenty of drama and somewhat different plot whilst remaining true to the original One of the best variations I've read。 Clever engaging storyline and a very happy ending。 Loved our familiar characters witty Lizzy sensible Charlotte beautiful kind naive Jane are all true to character as are bingley Darcy and Fitzwilliam。 Plenty of drama and somewhat different plot whilst remaining true to the original 。。。more
Anne
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I read the whole long winded book。 Needs a line editor and a story editor。 I do not want to discourage this new author。 She has some interesting ideas。 I always worry when an author starts on fan fiction sites and only thanks one beta reader。 The author might want to reconsider her pen name。 It was impossible to find this book on Amazon using it。 I’ll admit it personally turned me off also。 I agree with Marie’s extensive review and notes。 So I’m just going to mention many of the problems Marie d I read the whole long winded book。 Needs a line editor and a story editor。 I do not want to discourage this new author。 She has some interesting ideas。 I always worry when an author starts on fan fiction sites and only thanks one beta reader。 The author might want to reconsider her pen name。 It was impossible to find this book on Amazon using it。 I’ll admit it personally turned me off also。 I agree with Marie’s extensive review and notes。 So I’m just going to mention many of the problems Marie didn’t。 There was a line where Elizabeth provides relief to Darcy’s levity。 This makes no sense。 Too many modern words including input 20th century， crosshairs， sidelines and my ‘favorite’ the very 1960s word Kook。 There was a confusing passage about Lady Catherine being forbidden from the Gardiners’ house which made no sense。 Everyone’s character was dialed up to eleven from canon except Darcy who was dialed to Marianne Dashwood。 The word sensibilities was used 60 times。 。。。more
Marie
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Needs an Editor I may appear overly harsh in my review， and may ultimately be in the minority， but sometimes one has to be cruel to be kind。 I sincerely hope the author takes my review and comments from my notes and highlights as constructive。 If nothing else， I am always honest in my reviews and not purposely trying to be mean。There is a pretty good story here， but it took a great amount of patience for me to get through it。 I read every word。 Bottom line—too wordy and badly edited。 Unfortunate Needs an Editor I may appear overly harsh in my review， and may ultimately be in the minority， but sometimes one has to be cruel to be kind。 I sincerely hope the author takes my review and comments from my notes and highlights as constructive。 If nothing else， I am always honest in my reviews and not purposely trying to be mean。There is a pretty good story here， but it took a great amount of patience for me to get through it。 I read every word。 Bottom line—too wordy and badly edited。 Unfortunately， the book is sorely bogged down with too many extraneous parenthetical thoughts， repetitive quotes， and the excessive use of punctuation， especially commas。 There were too many run-on sentences that ruined the syntax of the phrase and interrupted my reading progress。 I was forced to re-read too many sentences to get the proper gist of what the author was attempting to express。 Many of these over-long sentences could have easily been broken up into two or more for more pleasing flow。 In the Kindle Unlimited version I borrowed， there are also technical glitches with some inconsistency in the line spacing and the occasional brief change in font。I almost gave up reading a few times， as my patience was tried。 I read for pleasure， but getting through this book seemed a chore。 However， as I felt there was definitely a story buried under all the unnecessary words and punctuation， I wanted to see where it would lead。 What I liked:- even though it was sometimes weighted with too many words， I appreciated the author’s insight/analysis of characters， offering some perspectives I had never considered;- Colonel Fitzwilliam’s role in the story as he provided guidance to Darcy along the way—his masterful use of the power of suggestion， for example;- the portrayals of Miss Bingley and Mr。 Collins—in keeping with their characters， but adding encounters that were quite diverting; and- in the end， providing Lydia a different option than Wickham。I felt that with a good editor and lots of chopping of this very long story， it could have been better。 I strongly suggest one be considered for future publications。 Sometimes， less is more。 I wavered between two and three stars。 I thought the story itself merited at least three。Well， less is more， Lucrezia。”“Andrea Del Sarto” Robert Browning 1855 。。。more
Jen
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Needs work。This book suffered from an excess of weirdly placed commas， run-on sentences， and non-sequiturs that took me completely out of the story。 The story itself was pretty good， but I will not be buying this book for my permanent collection。
Nell Lime
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read it for Mrs Bennets speechesI give it four stars not five because there are some long winded parts they ended up skipping over because they just kept repeating the characters thinking on what they were going through。 This story though it’s definitely worth reading especially for Mrs。 Bennett’s speeches and none of them are more hilarious than her premarital advice speech。 And also for Mr。 Collins proposal to Miss Bingley。 Those are both hilarious scenes。 Overall the story is clean which is g read it for Mrs Bennets speechesI give it four stars not five because there are some long winded parts they ended up skipping over because they just kept repeating the characters thinking on what they were going through。 This story though it’s definitely worth reading especially for Mrs。 Bennett’s speeches and none of them are more hilarious than her premarital advice speech。 And also for Mr。 Collins proposal to Miss Bingley。 Those are both hilarious scenes。 Overall the story is clean which is great， has a good plot。 。。。more
Doni
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It's a good P & P variation book。I enjoyed reading this creative storyfrom the first to last page。Keeps you wondering till the end。A Must Read！ It's a good P & P variation book。I enjoyed reading this creative storyfrom the first to last page。Keeps you wondering till the end。A Must Read！ 。。。more
Nan
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Great story。 So much fun。 The author keeps the characters true to form。 With some surprised。 There are also funny， lighthearted moments as well。 I am an avid Pride & Prejudice fan and read a lot of Fanfiction。 The author cuts new ground with the characters and even though they are essentially the same， it makes for a very interesting story。
Jeanie
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This was a fun read。。。Cleverly written！ Will read again！
Debra Edwards
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I particularly enjoyed that Elizabeth took Darcy to task for his poor behaviour soon after meeting him and encouraged him to consider what type of women would consider him desirable regardless; fortune hunters with no interest in an amiable relationship。 Colonel Fitzwilliam's contributions to Darcy's reform were inspired and funny。 I found this a very enjoyable P&P variation。 I particularly enjoyed that Elizabeth took Darcy to task for his poor behaviour soon after meeting him and encouraged him to consider what type of women would consider him desirable regardless; fortune hunters with no interest in an amiable relationship。 Colonel Fitzwilliam's contributions to Darcy's reform were inspired and funny。 I found this a very enjoyable P&P variation。 。。。more
Adele
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